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Free Thinker
Join Date: Jun 2008
Location: Milwaukee, Wisconsin
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New poem
I like doing a wide variety of things, from music, to writing, to drawing/painting/etc. I have decided to start sharing it with others and get some feedback to help me improve.
So in doing so, I thought I would share something with you guys I wrote today. It is by no means the final draft but I think its not terrible for an early version. Obviously it is about smoking, and any feedback would be appreciated. Expanding upward through the air Wispy and dissipating as she dances higher As I exhale I can feel the gift she bestows upon me Leaving her essence for all to enjoy Each time is as different as it is the same As if sight and sound are experienced for the first time Colors so vivid it seems like a dream Music engulfing me, taking me to a higher plane As I ride her peak I realize what perfection is Pulling me inward, finally care and judgment free Taking away the pain of this physical existence Gently setting me back down, she beckons me again I know its not the greatest thing ever, but I'm still perfecting my writing. Hope someone digs it. Peace and love y'all. |
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Join Date: Aug 2006
Location: Bay Area, CA
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Re: New poem
my only feedback is....
I dig it! ![]() Thanks for sharing ![]()
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Re: New poem
Wow! Nice!
Reading it I became more aware of my breathing. Weird. Thanks for sharing! Akorn ![]()
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Free Thinker
Join Date: Apr 2008
Location: Deep South USA
Posts: 155
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Re: New poem
Deep man. Deep
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Free Thinker
Join Date: Sep 2008
Location: way,... way up north
Posts: 25
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Re: New poem
cool, how sweet she really is.
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